All Comments on 'Swallowing Dan'

erotic, so knew, the idea

Cheating girlfriends are the best, there is simply nothing better than hot chicks panting and moaning as their tight pussies get stretched out and pounded by a big cock that doesn't belong to their boyfriend, especially when said boyfriend might catch said fucking. That thrill that they can't resist as you watch them get completely satisfied in ways they haven't been before is so naughty and exciting. Even just reading about it is hot.

...and this story shows that off so well, you did a fantastic job with this! Well-written all the way through from the characters to the interactions to the descriptive thoughts and foreplay scenes and even to all that *hot* dirty sex! The context of the plot made the sex even better too, that she was subconsciously attracted to him and overwhelmed from the physical sensations when her revenge plan failed. Connect that with the upfront, blatant cheating hint in the title/subtitle and it was just... mmm... delicious. I couldn't stop reading and it did not disappoint.

A criticism I have would be some of those humorous/funny lines. They were good for a smirk but I wasn't quite sure how they fit in with the rest of the story which seemed fundamentally serious as opposed to casual and light-hearted. They felt out of place.

Overall though I would say 5/5. Author teased a high-quality product and then delivered.

Another good read. Maybe you could do a short sequel to this one? Kelly and Dan round 2? Anyway, I'm really glad to see you posting more stories. Hope your next one isn't too far away.

Please do a sequel.

Do more of these stories. Since The Shadow Rising is on a hiatus, we need more of these. You did a great job with the buildup and everything. Bravo.

You're a master of descriptive visualization! Excellent use of adjectives. The build up was excellent, realistic psychology for both the males and female leads. I hope to find a sequel to this story.

Excellent!

and not a wife. It's SO much easier to dump the slut. Besides, as written, she seems to have an IQ of 10. Who cared what she did.

There's not enough authors out there telling stories from the female's perspective, first off, so thank you TONS for that just by itself. Also, there's very few well-written cheating girlfriend stories that DON'T turn into hardcore cuckold fetish tales. You, Clark Overns and The Shadow Rising are nailing this genre pretty well. I would go even further by saying that you've got the hottest of them all, though, sir. Well done!!

I think I hate myself for favoriting this, but damn it was hot!

I love,and hate it. I love the intensity, the hard sex, the small insinuations of master/slave-dynamic and Dans almost conquering of Montana. I hate the unfinishedness of the story. I'd like to see Montana fully submit, body, heart and soul to Dan, being fully conquered and taken, including taken from Pierce, belonging to Dan. Preferably with her confirmed pregnancy by Dan.

Too bad, they didn't let Pierce discover them fucking in the bed room.

I wish you were still writing!!

Fantastic skill as a writer. Kudos. Absolutely amazing. But I don't like stories of cheaters, especially not where the spouse / BF appears a clueless cuckold. I suppose some guys get off on this type of exploitation of another person's gullibility and trust, but it hurts me to see another person taken advantage of and laughed at behind their back. Again, fantastic skills as a writer. Just not my cup of tea as a story.

Is anyone really THAT stupid? I'm still laughing at how bad this was.

This was fantastic. I absolutely love how Monty actually felt terrible at what she did.

Please continue Dan and Montana's adventures.

about the real Montana

Absolute crap. 8 pages for that stupidity?

Any recommendations for similar stories? Would prefer from Dan's pov

Had a good story going until she brought Dan to her house. who would be that stupid with their boyfriend there? Would have given it a five bur could only give it a four.

Nothing quite like a gutter whore sociopath.

Excellent

Pls suggest such stories

That was an incredibly hot story!!

went off the rails when sshe brought boy toy to fuck in the house with "boyfriend" present.

one star .

ridiculous

the stupidity of this girl is staggering to the mind

Great!