All Comments on 'Tamara's Fantasy Come True'

This is a very disappointing story that read as though you did one draft and some basic editing before submitting i. I found it to lack a lot of qualities that I feel make a good, "Loving Wives," story and found that I lost interest after a few paragraphs. My feeling you need to involve more description instead of retelling a story. Plus you need to give readers a reason as to why they should invest their time reading this story, such as well developed characters, good dialog, or the character learns something about themselves instead of reading the numerous of other stories available on Literotica. Unfortunately I feel I was disappointed by this story. My own feeling, had you down a few more rewrites with a focus on characters, dialog, and descriptions instead of telling, this story might have received 5 stars from me.

Needs editing - the author switched from the past to the present tense - present tense is fine for giving stage directions in a screen play, but not fiction

The characters are undeveloped to put it mildly - why is hubby pimping out his wife to his/her best male friend?

There is no tension - she goes, she sees, she gets fucked in standard Literotica style

I would have given it a "1" but for the fact there are always worse submissions on any given day that use up my quota

Well it was great, it remnded me of the first time i was between my hubby and a pal. the way it feels to be so full and tense. there is no better feeling then when you become aware of the passion in the room. But we didnt fall asleep. i wanted so much more. i am so hot thinking about the both of them taking my throat and ass, and my fingers between my legs all three of us getting off together was something else keep writting i love how you think.kisses

I loved this story. It was hot enough to get me going and interesting enough to keep me through. Screw the editing, sometimes you just need to enjoy it without being critical.

I loved the way you used names in the story with multi partners. Keep up the good work. Love it Bunches!!!!!

I love how considerate the men are of Tamara. Sounds like a lot of fun.

A good cuck always makes his whore happy.