by damonX
I thought it was very well done, incredibly erotic. Best of all, you have a decent command of syntax and structure (i.e., your prose isn't torture to read).
I don't mind getting negative feedback, but if you state something like its "dumb" or "get a brain" please expand on those profound observations. Thanks again for your intelligent feedback 'anonymous'.
Damon--I think this is one of the best of your stories. I loved the story and the description.
let this girl walk out on her asshole dude and go with the nice guy. Would be a nice change the asshole loses. Or she could post all his cheating videos to like vimeo or facebook or something.
But I fail to see the revenge. The bf is clearly a player. This chick isn't his girlfriend she's just the girl he is currently banging. She was already going to fuck the narrator so she didn't bang him for revenge. So she recorded over one vid file but left him another. A file that will probably cause her to find her dumb ass on the street.
this is the hottest and best story I've evr read. keep up the good work...
So, while cheating on him in his own apartment/bed she discovers that he has been cheating on her. She feels that she deserves revenge. She takes it in the ass. Whatever.
Why do you have to be explained dumb? If you're reading your own story, you must be aware of what dumb means, right? A GF who sends her BF such a video knows that she has been his GF for the longest time and that her fucker will spend weeks in the hospital waiting for his broken bones to heal. That's why your story is dumb!!!