All Comments on 'The Landlady Ch. 01'

I loved that part about small dicks

That is the right way boys and men should be raised I just wished I was raised that way cause now I hope for a good spanking

It is a pretty well written story, but I’d suggest either changing to third person/omniscient, or removing the few portions describing what the landlady thinks or does when the narrator is not present. He has no way of knowing what she does when he’s not there, or of knowing what she’s thinking.

Yes, that's how we know the British. The men idiotic cuckold/wimps, the women idiotic sluts! The only thing missing is that you believe that in real life, except for the British, this is how it works!

How is an 18 year old not going to get erections? There is no provision for him to actually be a university student. The vigorous brushing was a sign of instability on her part.

She should have a cane in a stand in the hallway, which he has noticed when he arrives.

He is obviously destined to sort the garden out. Not University material, then, Uni, rather.

Stick to one tense rat swapping about.

It doesn't work the narrator trying to tell what the other woman is thinking