by greaterimp
Ol' Penny is quite a kid. You skirted the 18-year barrier brilliantly. The guessing game is a good Maguffin, as Hitchcock would have said. You're a really good writer--hot and simple prose, believable characters, a real sense of mise-en-scene. I could see that hotel room, and I've been to that class of convention, the kind of "waiter's tip" that lackeys get given in lieu of a raise or a bonus by bosses who need to show presence without themselves wasting time. Overall, a winner, definitely four-plus.
Simply superb!!!!! Highly erotic, great story line, very believable and enviable, but I would like to see the follow-up where he follows Penny back to her reception, surreptitiously creates a believable identity, identifies her family, confirms her age, finagles an introduction to Penny, and invites her back to his hotel for the evening.