All Comments on 'The Neighbour'

If this is your first story, please don't stop writing. It was well written and brought back feelings of my first time also. Great job, keep it up. I rate it a ten.

Very well done. Keep it up!

But by having him pretty experienced -- even though a virgin -- you missed tll of the step by step awe and wonder. Better if she'd been his TEACHER (not in school, just teaching him) and somewhat teasing, dragging it out for much longer.

keep going, this story could use another chapter or just with another story written as well.

I like it. Keep going, add a chapter and build on the characters. She has become the "Teacher", maybe this is something entirely new to her.

I enjoyed your story and was engrossed in the story of a young man losing his innocence to an older woman. You have captured the moment wonderfully. I hope you write many more and look forward to see how you grow and improve. Well done.

I like the descriptive narrative and the basic storyline too. Maybe next time he could meet a 21 year old redhead who has a secret.......

Hey, there better be a next time!

Yess!