by TxRad
Thank you, for a wonderful breathtaking story, Tx.
I had to stop several times, to get a hold on myself;
Very very HOT !!!
I gave you a 5. I sure hope you continue this one, there seems to be plenty of room for further examanation. Please keep writing.
The sex scene was one of the best I've ever read, although a little over the top. The build up to the finale was well done. You presented enough detail for the images of the bar, stage, and table to be believable. The dialogue was right on and the hat trick was a neat idea.
These two scenes are a sound beginning and as has been suggested by others could lead to a "real" story rather than a stroke piece. There are a number of routes you could follow to make for interesting reading. I enjoyed this a great deal and will look to see if you have written some other stories on this site.
In fact one of your best IMHO. I usually much prefer novels or novellas but your short stories are about as good as they come. Keep on keepin' on friend. Lynn