All Comments on 'The PI Who Knew Too Much Ch. 01'

$60 a day? For a Private Eye?

‘Dame’ ? Maybe this scenario is set in 1950? Nah, not with a Yamaha.🙄

Interesting, but dumb.

I knew that dame was trouble!

And this author ALWAYS writes well. The critics are probably disappointed that there's no wanking material. BTW, the S&W .35 is an offbeat choice. Liked it.

now what not much of a story try to do better

no sex, no cheating, MC not married or fucking a married person

Why is this in LW?

Wrong category one star

Anonymous is wrong again.

Because story 3.5 so far 1.5 because there was no gay boy husband sucking dicks or no fem.heater bitch in the story .Thanks for a good read!!

Modern-day noir story. Seems a bit fast-pasted; usually the PI doesn’t get shot til a few chapters further in. Thee as t said, Um looking forward to what happens next.

Oh, and like someone else mentioned, the .35 is an interesting choice!

Wrong category

Waste of time

and this should be a good series.

leave us hanging, will you?

Mike Hammer would have been on the ball and no dame would have took him down.

Looking forward to the next chapter. 4 stars.

Look folks this is chapter #1, my interest has grown. The P.I. talks like one I've met that has trouble making ends meet. Give it a chance and then you can make something besides snap comments.

An interesting start - especially for this topic. Curious to see what happens next!

Even Humor & Satire wouldn't be appropriate. We need an 'AB's Wandering Mind' category. A story like this really should have a lurid paperback cover with a picture of the classy dame with her pistol and the PI with his Lucky.

And for Anonymous1, confused about the Yamaha, back in the old days the Japanese hadn't come onto the scene with decent bikes until long after people like Mr Spector had hung up his license. Anonymous2 corrected you.

Lue

Ps: Back then I was told that the Tiger Ten was a better machine.

Two pages and our hero is shot!!! He didn't uncover anything....Why would she shoot an innocent guy?? Waiting for the next part.

It's good to see you back. Thanks for another thriller.

that the police detective did not want to make the family notification himself. The widow is obviously crucial to the investigation and is a likely suspect in the murder. The detective harms his fact finding efforts if he alllows a private investigator, who is both employed by the widow and a witness to the crime, to speak with her first.

Mrs. Bezier is not such a loving wife.

5

Good job with the Secretary character development. I like her already....

. . . Lieutenant Tragg.

that joint, my friend.

Waiting for Ch 2.

This is a smal first part,

so lots of unanswered questions.

What I'm missing most

is a background check on the Beziers.

It is strange that Wilkes didn't go with him

to meet the widow.

But not necessarily a fault in the story.

This start is interesting and well done.

Top ratings from me.

why did he forget to duck. TK U MLJ LV NV

Nice twist at the end. Completely unexpected.

Good story I like it.

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I hope it was just a typo and the 'small' pistol she shot him with was a .25 not a "35"?

I take back the comment about the '35'. I'm no expert and that rare and little used cartridge is new to me. Although the bullet diameter was actually only .32 of an inch or so. Or perhaps you were referring to the S&W model 35 revolver, but I don't think that would classify as a 'small' gun. Well, not huge anyway, by today's standards anyway. Not sure about 1950's standards.

Interesting start - like an old Mike Hammer story. Looking forward to next chapters

A .35 caliber??? Really; a .35??? That caliber hasn't existed since the 1890's or early 1900's if it did at all. And your editor didn't catch it as well, hmmmmm. Make it a .22LR, .22 Magnum, an out of date .32 or a .38/380 maybe even a 9mm, anything except a nonexistent caliber firearm.