All Comments on 'The Scion of Shyamgarh Ch. 03'

A fantastic story with a classic revealation in the climax. Well done

very well written. thrilling revelation at the end -- like a Bollywood story! But, I really liked the command over the language and vocabulary: very unlike submits from India!

Good tone and pacing. One observation: don't say "butts." It should be "butt," singular, or better, "bottom" or "ass." The British say "arse," but to my American ear, "ass" sounds better. It has a trace of vulgarity to it which "bottom" doesn't have so if you want it to be a little coarse then say "ass." "Butt" is a little blunt. Say that if you want to be blunt. So "bottom" or "butt" or "ass," but not "butts." Butt, singular, includes both cheeks.

i would have to agree..best indian author on literotica!!!

incest thing honeymoon stories is my favorite, A Son witness of his mothers honeymoon, or A Mother witness of her sons honeymoon, or a bro and sister honeymoon while mom and family witness, a couple making honeymoon while their parents watching and involving, both bring temptation.

thanks

Brilliant ending. What a story. Need more like this