All Comments on 'The Studly Duckling'

Really enjoyed it. "Like a wet bag of shit", lolol

You need to give this a couple of re-reads to clear up the spelling errors. It wasn't bad enough to cause a distraction (though I did spend a few seconds wondering what a panis and cany were before realising you meant panic and Candy). Not good at reviews so won't say more than "I like it" and I generally enjoyed the plot - well, that and getting your work proofed.

I laughed out loud at some of the imagery, you have a great turn of phrase, and obviously had a ball writing this. I gave you 5 stars, thank you for brightening my day!

Usually in stories like this you make the cocky douchebag gets all the girls. But this time, it looks like the nice guys level up and score like crazy. And the milfs... Delicious! A stud with a brain like tesla, the muscles of hercules, and the sex drive of a satyr is an unstoppable, erotic thing. All in all, you get 5 stars for this!

...you need a hand to help you.

Just another teen jerk off fantasy of huge cocks, huge tits and the good guy beating the shit out of the bad guy. Yawn.

Goin to be honest at first I got very pissed at this one I mean everyone treats him like the shit and when the guy pissed on his bed I was like what the fuck hit him with a chair or something glad I keep reading he gets revenge and he gets the girl and he looked for his best friend. Five stars man very good work

Nothing erotic to read except some sadistic morons and a family wimp with wishful thinking. Yawn

And we know it was not written by the student who got A+ in English.

Another awesome story. I love to see a sequel, maybe Elliott's transformation.

The premise of the story was well thought out and it contained few errors but ultimately it was a disappointment. I have no issues with massive cocks or tits littering a story if that's what the author wishes, after all it's his fantasy. No, the major issue for me was that the hero of the piece became no better than the low lives he was embarrassed by and sank like a rock to the bottom of the pond with them.

The author tried to maintain the idea that he was a better person but Elliott's treatment of the women dispelled that idea very quickly on his return and he became just like Johnny in the end. Yes, the sister, teacher and wicked step-mother did not deserve any better but by doing so he would have shown them and Johnny up even more. As for his treatment of Mila who had turned him into super-stud and therefore owed everything he now had to; his friend Lee, who if not at least seeking his permission he should have warned first about his intention out of genuine friendship and Lee's mother Kimberly, whom he only slightly paid any real attention to her needs, all it really helped show was that he was no better that any other bulling, macho knobheads.

It was a shame as it could have been a triumph of good over evil, well over the kind of tosser we should all despise anyway, but instead it was just an essay in how power, in this case sexual power, corrupts.

seriously you fucked it up at page 2 all the fighting am i to believe that a fat nerd can transform into a hulk witin 3 months ? bad story dont write again please

Screw what everyone else says. This story is pretty great. I hope you would consider doing a sequel.

Keep this one going it's needs more chapters

Story is awesome hope you have more chapters to come to good to stop

Awesome story hope you do a sequel.

Despite the grammar, the action was good and the story was irrational, but, in a good way. Five stars.

You have to wright more Chapters soooooon pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaasssssssssss.

It was a decent story until you fucked it up with the end no real son would be happy about his best friend fucking his mom if for no other reason than the betrayal from it that and this whole master shit that you wrote into it did not help but it was still decent I will have to give it two stars cause the end all you did with it was promote a mother betraying her son and a dude betraying his best friend I know if my best friend was to betray me I would kill him and if my mother betrayed me I would have no choice but to take it for the most part but I would disown her and never talk to her again

Am I the only person who thought this story sucked.

She trained him in martial arts...and sex

I was expecting Singapore sex ninjas to jump out at anytime with pussy shaped ninja stars and cock shaped caltrops.

This is what you get from someone who beats off to mma matches and hasn't had pussy since he was shat out of his mother.

Pure drivel!

This is one of the most insanely idiotic things I have ever read. At no point in your rambling, incoherent story were you even close to anything that could be considered a rational thought. Everyone is now dumber for having read it. I award you no points, and may God have mercy on your soul.

I think this is my favorite of your stories, simply because the good guy won. Nice change of pace from your usual stuff.

Hey there

I've gotta admit that I usually stay well away from pain & humiliation, but this, well it sort of grabbed me & didn't let up until I read about Elliot losing his virginity. Thanx for the intro, I might now have a ponder through the rest of your collection to see if another might hold me the same as this the intro for me...thanks Mark

Why would our MC be okay with Mila or his half-sister giving another guy, Lee, a blowjob or fucking him for that matter?

Well, his half-sister is a slut anyway, but wasn't she degraded to his slave or something? She should have asked for permission first!

And I thought he and Mila were exclusive, but if she is blowing another guy then it can't be too serious between them, too bad :/

The overall story was good, my favorite part was that Mila trained the nerd into a successful and strong stud! And that he fucked finally the brains out of innocent, horny Kimberly. I would have wished for more parts tough.

I didn't expect the twist in this story but it was still entertaining. I didn't think he would be that rough on Ms. Kwon.

I wish I could give this story six stars!

First he says he owns them now and as soon as he leaves they fuck someone else. This hole story is so fucked up. Even the 'happy' ending is super weird.

I don't like it

The main story was okay, a boy is treated unfairly but doesn't want to cheat. Then he goes off to Singapore and with very little description, turns into a "stud" who is just as arrogant as every other one I've read about. And the ending was not good. You can't just end the story with "Half-sister," Elliot laughed. In total: boo.

(10/30/2021) This was an enjoyable read. It was funny and erotic with a great good versus evil premise. But I do have a few critiques. To have made this more believable you could have extended the time away in Asia from the three months to more like his senior year of high school or his freshman year of college and also toning down the horny level of the town. The implication was that Elliot while he had become a master stud was not as evil as Johnny or his dad; that we never get to meet. But IMO, he was still too dark. Maybe you could have toned down his testosterone level just a bit. IMO, this story could have been extended a few more pages by adding a bit more detail. Hell, I think it could have been made into a great series by expanding on his family dynamic, his relationships or lack of in-school, and his time in Asia with his dad and his new girlfriend. I gave your story 5 stars but IMO, it could be so much more.

Who wrote this - a 12 year-old?

THE most ridiculous story that I have ever read!

The start was promising but then you skipped several steps and it just crumbled. If it didn't improve after the beginning I would've given 3 stars. The wreck the story became however only deserves one star.