All Comments on 'Tough Week At Work Ch. 01'

I loved your story. I like the boss taking advantage of her and the risk of getting pregnant. I hope you write a part 2 where she is shared with co-workers and clients!

Tom

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Hot story. Have her wear nylons and a garter belt with her mini dresses to entertain the clients and workers

Really stupid idea.

Did this even get a proofread? The misplaced or absent quotation marks alone were enough to make this thing a chore to finish reading.

You should think about using one of the volunteer editors.

Loved it, I hope you write a part 2. I like the getting her pregnant angle and her husband having to live with it and raise the baby.Jen

I thought it was a hot Story..very yummy. I loved the control. I did think the whole pregnant bit was a little unrealistic. I do look forward to your 2nd part.

*Cry*

It's good but needs a ton of improvement. The lack of punctuation, missing letters, stupid parts of the convo between the two. and i just couldn't get either person... they seemed so one dimensinal.

This is a slam, bam ,thank you ma'am. Use some tact. Undo her blouse. Undo her bra and play with her breasts. Take time and use words. Describe how you lifted her skirt.

How would you make her feel better, so she wasn't crying? How could you make it more like sex than a rape? If you did, you might get more!!

This was a good short story that didn't get too involved in the history of the people or too much back ground. I liked it the way it was written, in the manner that most people talk. I don't usually leave comments but some of the feedback left here was ugly. This is fantasy that you read while you masturbate, plain and simple. This is not a novel or being submitted to readers digest. You folks with the critical comments should go back and read them again with an open mind and realize just how stupid you sound. (the comments not the story) I.E. needs more dialoge or its not realistic, he's raping her. I don't know of a police report where the victim stated that she wishes she had more intimate contact with the attacker or he didn't talk to me enough. Get a life you dumb asses this is FICTION AND FANTASY you wanna-be editors lay off. I'm getting tired of reading all the negitive feedback from Ya'll (that's You and All) Now go away and be negitive no more MI1369@yahoo.com

I love control stories, believe me. But I didn't even make it through this one, because the grammar and punctuation were so distracting----you seem like a person with great concepts and stories, though, just clean it up a little.

Disgusting! I pity a mind that would fantasize a story like this one. By the way I am a man who treats women with respect.

I really like the idea of this story but it did feel a little rushed.

Im looking forward to the next instalment as I can see this getting really good but would love to see more build up a bit of background to the charactera involved.