All Comments on 'Train Journey to a Fucking Day'

Always good to hear the story of a good fucking from the woman's point of view.

One or the other works well for a story like this. But to start with first person and then suddenly switch to second person simply spoiled a story that was progressing well.

Second person rarely works anyhow. (Unless its a cookbook or a maintenance manual.)

Addressing the reader as 'you' as in "You look me deep in my eyes as you slowly enter my cunt with your wide cock... " is irrelevant to people like me. I am not equipped with a cock, wide or any other dimension.

It was going well as a story until that unfortunate switch.

Lue