All Comments on 'Trina'

I think that you got it just right. I think it's hard to pitch the conversations and the actions together to create a story that flows naturally like the flowing of liquids from our bodies and from bottles. Nice one! One tiny query; I spell Champagne like this! I don't know where they spell it like you do?

Reasonably well crafted.

Only 2 odd notes:

campagne!

A single man in his forties with only one child is not very likely to have had a vasectomy.

Nice story, suggestive, playful, and hot by turns.

The only real problem is that I could swear I've read it before, maybe 15 years ago. I mean, down to the final line. There were some additions / revisions (such as Viagra), but it was all very familiar.

Still, worth another read.

You need a spell checker on your writing program. Otherwise, a hot sexy story with a good build of sexual tension.

Champaign is a city in Illinois. The sparkling wine is spelled champagne. You really need the services of a good editor.

...so he made an editing gaff. Sow what, what did you write?? Great story! 5!!