by gapster7
In the 1st half you talked about how enchanted Ben was with his brother's GF. You repeatedly say things like, "Of all the girlfriends he's had over the years, you were my favorite," he "admired this lady," "her eyes danced with wit," etc. You even say, "What could my idiot brother possibly have been thinking to let this one slip out of his hands?" Ben seems to have been smitten with this girl for a long time and for much more than her sexuality.
But then in the 2nd half, you don't develop this potentially beautiful relationship at all. Instead, Ben treats her like a fuck toy and has no interest in promoting a romance with this girl he's idealized for so long. If I'd been Ben, I'd have tried to get a long term relationship started with this dream girl. "When comes such another?"
Aside from this criticism, the sex was good. However, unless she has severe anatomic abnormalities, there's no way she could "push her cervix forward and into [his] mouth."
This was the hottest story I've read on here in a long time! I sure hope there is a second chapter coming! I would love to see them have a relationship, and maybe bring her girlfriend into the picture! Now that would be a really hottt scene!!!
Hot sex, just an anatomy point; the cervix isn't on the outside of a woman's body. You sure wouldn't get hit in the face with it while going down on a woman.
If you ever get hit in the face with a woman's cervix call 911 immediately (or whatever the equivalent is in your country)
She has suffered a major prolapse and is in danger of her internal organs falling out.