All Comments on 'Young Couple Meets Older Love'

One complaint is that you use "your" often when "you're" is required, like in the last paragraph. "wait till your nearly 60" is incorrect. You are really saying wait until you are 60 and you're is the contraction for you are, thus making "wait until you're 60."

THEIR house (not 'there')

They wandered around (not wondered) etc.

But apart from these and many other grammatical distractions..

I liked the way you had everyone getting something out of the relationship. It wasn't a swamping but a sharing. Thanks

It was a nice, erotic story that was almost totally ruined by your poor spelling and grammar. Please get an editor or learn English. Even American is better than this.

When i submitted this story i submitted 3 others at the same time, all edited and all fine. Somehow this one got away and for that i apologise. If i could withdraw it and re-submit i would but, unfortuantely i cannot. Once again i apologise.

Mikro

I am nearly 60 and I loved it and would enjoy another part. If I could only be Mike...lol. Very well written thanks for sharing.

Manfred

amazing story telling,just wish mary had got some action too

great read. i'm 60 and waiting for my helen and jerry to move in next door,just have to convince the present neighbors to sell up,lol!

This was a good..... I go through the stories on here every weekend and so many of them are just pure crap. It's sucks when you can't get through the first few paragraphs without closing them to try and find a story worth reading. This one was well worth reading. I also have to agree with barterman, wish Mary would of gotten involved in some play, even if it was only her being a voyer or exhibitionist. If there is a part 2.... I'll be looking forward to reading it. Thanks !!!

As others have said before me, excellent story, would love to have a part 2, 3 ,4 or however many more you choose to write. Kept me interested to the end, and wanting more.

Thank you

A very enjoyable read, smoking hot sex and characters that seemed very real, plus taking a river / canal boat trip made for a very believable story in my mind.

Thanks for the very good story.

Please write more chapters :-)

I loved this story. I am just shy of 67. I still function sexually, but much of my former physical vigor has been replaced by reading and fantasizing, and I derive tremendous enjoyment from reading stories like yours. This story is well-conceived and well-written. It can also serve as a perfect point of departure for one or several sequels. I really hope you will exploit this opportunity, and I will check back to your page frequently to find out if you have, meanwhile reading other stories there that I now believe might be quite enjoyable also! I strongly suspect that my desire for more installments of this story, and my anticipated enjoyment from reading your other stories are probably both shared by most of your other readers. Thank you!

I do this every 3-5 months. Of course I tend to concentrate on pre-teen mostly. Oh,did I tell you I am a Brit? In this country this is all accepted as norm. Everyone does it. That is why 9 1/2 % of children in Pommyland are bastards ! "1" !

Im 57 and i fucked a 16 year old boy! His cock was so amazing! I wish i was mary!!!

You told this story so well, with great timing and anticipation, and never hurrying. I thoroughly enjoyed it. For the guy who said in his comments that the husband (Jerry) was played, I have to ask, "If he doesn't like stories about sharing couples, what is he doing reading 'Loving Wives'?" I loved it.

I could not stop reading it. Keep doing what your doing. Great story hope there more to come.

Full of surprises, fun and laughter, from me. I was going to just read a page at a time but could not stop.

H,

Being 74 I understand the story and believe it. That could have been me. I write a bit too and I enjoyed it.

Thank you.

Paul

mary fucking jerry, right?

It is of course a fantasy but one I have had about a young mother who lived next door for a while. When we get older emotional things become simpler and there is so much love to give but no one to give it to. Young people have so many worries that they go through life needy. It's a shame we can't put those things together unless we're Jack Nicholson.

Thanks for a beautiful story.

Will Mary and Jerry hook up? I hope.so!

I read the author's last paragraph, I'm 60 this is a wonderful fantasy, well done.