All Comments on 'A Virgin No More'

Good premise.

But lacks details. And moves ahead much too fast.

"I had stroked it only briefly before I had this compulsion to pull it towards my aching vagina, climbing between my legs he was ready to penetrate me, my mind reeling with god knows how many thoughts I felt his cock rub up against me before poking its head into my entrance."

That's it? That's the whole description of activities before cock inserted into pussy?

Frankly, disappointing.

Three stars.

Enjoyed your story…well done

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April602

Nice idea; sexy plot. But please find an editor. Find a way to break long phrases into several sentences. One sentence is not a paragraph, nor does it need 6 commas. One sentence should not run 15 lines.

You asked for constructive comments to help you improve your writing. Here are a couple.

1) Look up the definitions of the words "climatic" and "climactic," and "complementary" and "complimentary."

2) Each of your paragraphs is a single sentence, containing several different thoughts, separated by commas. In most cases, you should replace the commas with periods. (Each noun/verb combination would start a new sentence, in most cases.) A good textbook on high school English would be helpful.

For story content, 4*