All Comments on 'I've Been Set Up Ch. 03'

It was disappointing, it seemed rushed with hardly any flow to it. Like you just had to get it posted. Generally I love your writing but it seems that you had some sort of writers block or just didn't have a basic guideline on how you wanted this chapter to go?

her doing somethimg to another guy with him there seemed kind of insensetive towards him.

A good chapter, but it wasn't very erotic for Jackie giving some other guy a hand job.

All I could think about at that time was, what was Jake thinking about while she was doing it.I think he would feel humiliated.

Perhaps the girls could stay with Jake and Jackie while they go to school, and it would be like Jake would be their dad, but with benefits.

Thanks for the read...

I'll be waiting for part two.

I enjoyed the read but was wondering who the girls father is not sure if it was mentioned and I missed it wouldn't it be interesting if the father of them turned out to be jake

but taking to long to get to the point and still don't get why they needed to set him up the reasons so far make no sense

So Jackie wants Jake but then gives a stranger a hand-job (only because she couldn't do more without a condom). And she does it without even a hint of discussion about that sort of activity beforehand. Everything I've read from this series portrays Jake as a sensitive sort of guy who has been burned before in intimate settings (the gf laughing at his "grower"). And his sister knows this about him but still risks hurting him and ruining Carla's wish for Jake to be her first.

If you wanted a gloryhole scene why not just use Jake's cock? That would have kept the intimacy intact and the characters in-character.

I really dislike stories that go from loving and intimate to out of control free-for-all fuck-fest for no reason. It's like authors get bored and decide to change the tone of the story midway through.