All Comments on 'Jill'

does not get better just because you make it a simple post instead of 10 chapters. this is just ugly and dumb. you have no sense how to write an erotic story.

A surprising number of female fans asked that I put all the chapters under one title for ease of one-handed reading. So I did. Very little changed with this release. I may have corrected one or two grammatical errors, but that was about it. Overall, the Jill story has received positive reviews. I'm all for constructive criticism. Negative critics... give me something to fix. For those that have sent the positive comments, I appreciate the reinforcement.

But you tell a hot tale. Wish you would work some bi male sex in as well. Cuckold hubby? Does he know he is a cuckold? After so much thick hard cock pounding her pussy and ass when he was on the trip, he had to have known she was stretched from something more than a toy. And her bi situation with the hot Asian woman. That was hot. Even though some of the sex was rushed and lacked detail, it was still a 5 in my book.

Please continue this story!

Crazy good story. You have a real talent. Thank you for sharing.