All Comments on 'Keeping It Together'

Put them where they don't belong; leave them out where they do. The point is to have fun with apostrophes and sprinkle them indiscriminately like germs from a sneeze. That is just one variety of the many errors in this otherwise decent story. No respect for language.

Many that was another great story that you wrote about mother, son and daughter getting together after father's death. I like the way you described the sequence of events in this family's life. The second chapter would be nice if you have time.

I've read a lot of you stuff...both here and on Passion (i'm seagull416). Am most fond of your incest stories; i just find them more exciting/arousing. Would like to see where these three go next. Keep up the good work!!

Not as hot or dirty as some but you write well enough to keep me interested. I loved your dialog and how you had the three of them reacting to real with each other. Oh yes, I did get hard and jerk off! Thanks for a fun incest story.

Why did you stop the story just when it was ready to get hot with all three in bed?

Anon did'nt like the way you strew apostrophes around and Bisquit thought it was'nt as hot as some although he managed to get a boner and jack off. Me, I just enjoyed it. Give us more from your nice dirty mind.

A wonderful erotic story it's a great read.

A well writen erotic story, of mom , sister and son, all having good sex with other.I hope to read some more of their tryst, and hopefully love affair between all of them. Thanks..........Rich

a little strange that he hung around after he was caught especially after he heard them talking a normal guy would have left either to think or never to come back other than that it was ok try to not to rewrite human nature people never act the way you writers say i like realistic and believable sounding stories

I have read incest stories and the guy does his mom when she was toying herself just does not fit and unrealistic and so is mom and daughter sex and then threesome is wholly gross(not fitting with story) as

if a father's death leads to the above.

IF he went back and that is a big if he would not hang around them since as you said he was not close to them. IF he went back he would spend as much time as possible alone no way would either the mom or sister pay any attention to him since neither was close to him AS YOU SAID. you write one thing then contradict yourself that really ruins a story. once you set the plot and charicters profiles you need to maintain them not change them. this needs a major rewrite and a good editor. please stop screwing up your storiesit sounds like two or three people wrote this without talking to eachother total waste of time.

you have a grat fell for incest taboo ... your up thare whith the best of thene keep it up .. ty leann xxxxxx

Ok you ruined it with the whole mother daughter thing.make a sequal were mom gets preg or dan moves out for some reason. other than that it was good.

Tim

I enjoy your writing. I read mostly incest stories

Love incest. Makes everything so simple. No head games. Love it when you write stories about family being there for each other in a time of need.

Needless to say, I fretted and worried about it the entire time I was gone, trying to come up with some reasonable justification for my behavior without coming up with one, and then sheepishly returning home a while later knowing I would have to face my mother.

@@@ I'll never understand the storyline mentality of getting caught jacking off and feeling like you need to explain yourself, be ashamed or embarrassed (within reason, heh). I would have thought 'wups!' And forgotten all about it, other than wondering if mom jilled off over seeing it, hehe @@@

"Fuck the lawn!" I said standing.

@@@ Whats this?? Is the male character in a story around here going to actually go fuck his family without being dragged to the bed kicking and screaming?! Will wonders never cease! @@@

Was good till t he end of the chapter.

i thought it was headed for some bro/sis loving, and it ended up a threeway. nice tale.

The implication of breaking the threeway and dating others killed my mood

Yeah, I have read several of the incest stories by this author and that is the way he ends them all. No lasting romantic relationship. Just a "we're doing this till something better comes along" type of relationship. But otherwise, I have enjoyed his stories, though there are a few series he never finished. Just a "to be continued" from 10 or more years ago. Wish someone would pick up the ball and run with it.