All Comments on 'Our First MMFMM Ch. 01'

I would appreciate it if you didn't continue. It can only get worse.

This could profit by proofreading, but I look forward to another chapter.

Hope for chapter two soon

Let's hope subsequent parts to this story aren't so short and that there is some basic proofing.

Appreciated.

Is English your first language? Your grammar/misuse of words is terrible. I found several mistakes in just one sentence. I tolerate one or two mistakes because editing can take the fun out of writing but your story has so many errors that it took the fun out of reading it.

It doesn't end well.

You're both "high" educated, but your English sucks!

Waste of time.

Here's a hint. Drop the "true story" garbage. You're on a porn site, on the world wide web. No one believes a word coming out of your mouth and onto the pages. Telling us that something is "true" just makes us laugh at you and does nothing for the story line.

Get an editor. Try again. This was awful.

1 star

To be fair, she did have a masters in lawyer and they did speak intense with each other. Finally, he did have a commode in his bedroom, he's got that going for him at least.

If you have it all written but not submitted, get an editor.

If you don't have it written yet, try to heat up the sex play, speed up the pace, protect both the marital status and the image of the cuckold.

Otherwise please spare us another cuck humiliation story.

you have done well as you have attracted the whine baby patrol of 26thNC and his group of losers who crawl out from under their rocks whenever someone dares to write a story where the wife has sex with someone else. Keep the story going. And if they bother you too much, you have the power to delete them and shut them up.

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You're both "high" educated, but your English sucks!

@sbrooks, have you read your own latest story supposedly edited by your sweet inspiration who even with 5 editors and her OWN editing has many, many errors throughout her stories.

As for this garbage, don't continue.

Your story is pretty hot, but you need someone to proofread/edit your work before you post it.

First, english is my second language, apologuise if my english is bad.

It would be nice with examples of where the language is so wrong that it ruins your reading.

Second, this is a true story, belive it or not.

Not the best language.

Probably your second language, and then your skills are impressive.

I guess none of the other "commenters" evens neither speak nor writes a second language.

Looking forward to the next part.

Not the usual "my wife has 34DD-tits and a goddess".

Not the usual vivid descriptions.

A lot of thoughts and feelings, interesting angle of a story.

A real experience is my guess.

Given that English isn’t your first language what you’ve written so far is very well done, the spelling and grammar isn’t so bad that it makes the story too difficult to read. An editor would help.

It’s a very erotic story and very realistic, it shows all the depth and uncertainty that are inevitable with this sort of first time encounter. Thanks for sharing.

Too funny and too ridiculous to take seriously. True story? I need to see the video.

I'm loving your story and the way your wife is changing in front of you

Just thanks to those enjoying my story :)

Sexy beginning