All Comments on 'The Holiday Experience'

A good editor would help correct the numerous spelling errors but not a bad effort.

I had to read the story twice, I couldn't find any semblance of a story either time. You took a fabulous premise, and started into the narrative in the water, and then no evolution, other than they were exhausted and fell asleep

This is a brief summary of 3rd-rate porn. A shame, because with care and attention, taking time with the detail and pace, it could be a fun story.

this could be a great story, i wonder if this was a true story, and not a fantasy for the readers?

Not a bad start. However, Mark was made a cuckold by a strange woman. Not acceptable at all!

Very short but still very enjoyable.