All Comments on 'The Power Game Ep. 01'

Please oh please let this be the end of this pathetic piece of shit. Consider, for the sake of all readers on this site, never posting anything ever again. I'm not saying never write again, just that you keep anything you do write to yourself.

What part of this was romance?

what the hell was that ?

written by a 12 year old, (pussycat)

Don't quit your day job...seriously, this was absolute drivel.

For me, the story was overshadowed by the distracting grammar. Dialogue sometimes had quotation marks and sometimes didn't. At times, it seemed like a script with the characters name followed by a colon. At times there was no colon after their name. Don't quit writing. However, please consider the section in Literotica titled "Writer's Resources" which offers much information on polishing a story. Looking forward to your next work.

What story?

Please forget the English language, so we never have to read anything this terrible again.

I've never seen a story scored this low.

You made a great story, ignore the haters.

Thank you all. I do accept the story and writing was poor and vouch that i will comeback stronger with best story and write-up.

Rk07, I hope you're writing my Kartik story lol.