All Comments on 'The Tease'

Great read, love the way it went along, great to think of a women like her could be around.....

Difficult to read because ther were Large O everywhere with an accent above the O'.

I am sure it was a good story but I had to give it up the O' was getting up my nO'se, sorry

Yes, the formatting issues in the first 2 pages are annoying, but the quality of the story makes up for it. Only criticism I have is that the complication of the ex-husband is weak - the runup, the events, and the explanation are a little flat. That section of the story needed more emotional intensity - whether more panic on his part, more anxiety on hers, or a more direct meeting of the ex and the perve, or Don and the perve.

When do the babies arrive? Just a short story this time will do.

Enjoyable read, well done.

I especially enjoyed this piece. The slow build up of their relationship seemed to flow perfectly. The lack of actual sex drifted into the background just as it drifted into the background for Perve. The final consummation seemed very well stated and I was pleased with the brevity with which it was approached. Thank you for a wonderful read.

Ain't northern California great?

Since I live in the UK, the geography in the story was almost as interesting as the sex.