All Comments on 'Vanessa's Awakening'

utter silliness.

I liked the story, good characters and a gentle First Time story. I would recommend an editor moving forward, there's plenty of help available here on Literotica!

I would have enjoyed the story more if it doesn't change from past to present tense so often. (see what I mean?) I found the spelling mistakes distracting. Use the free proofreading offered by the site to polish your submissions.

it was kinda gross and unrealistic but I'm literally reading porn so what should I expect